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If I Died

If I died, if I didn't exist,
Would you feel pain, would you feel bliss,
Would the heavens cry or the demons sing,
Would you feel the burn, would you feel the sting,
Would the lies be truth, would content become regret,
Would you remember me, would you forget,
Would you fall to your knees, would you begin to cry,
Would you ever be able to say goodbye…


I want you to hurt; I want you to grieve,
I want you to stay and never leave,
Miss me, want me, never let go,
Your happiness, your joy, to me you owe,
As I ready to mount the reaper's horse,
I want you to bathe in everlasting remorse,
May your heart bleed, may the wound never heal,
May you pray, beg, and wish for one last feel,
A good thing is gone; you did not treat me well,
My desires, your denial, I'll see you in hell
This is another aspect of human nature. Not only do many of us wonder what people would think if we died, but that one person who may deny their feelings and barricade you for so long, would they feel regret for shunning all that time, and the most spilling question, would you enjoy their pain?
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NovaAkita Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014
Oh my gods. This is fucking beautiful. The raw energy and emotion put into this is wow.  This is speechless I am.
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ObsessedWivCaelan Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Student Artist
your rhymes are so touching :) i feel this way about people...
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Malachi1991 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
whaaaaaaaaat??? This is dope as hell baby bro. Like some educated, emo, fuck you, realist stuff! I don't even think I could write this good.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Student Writer
haha thx bro! I try
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azaleapeaock Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011   Writer
this is epicness
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
lol thank you!
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Professional General Artist
I hate to say it, but yes I would enjoy their pain.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
lol you arent the only one
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HorsesofPoseidon Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's a very good piece of work. I love the perspective as you explained in the comments, and you put words to it so beautifully :aww:
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! And course, who couldn't relate? lol
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HorsesofPoseidon Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! Yes, who indeed? :XD:
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
Brilliantly written piece which makes for a very intresting read, but what makes it great is that throughout it, even though it seems selfish and cruel to want people to suffer, I couldn't help but agree slightly with the longing for those you will leave behind to feel a significant loss at your death.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much! And I agree, I myself have sadly felt like this even though I consider myself a good person lol Its that dark alter ego of ours that we can't seem to control. It intrigues me :)
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
meh, apparently when you write the characters you create are magnifications of aspects of your own personality.
It has ever since then facinated me to look at my own characters and see what aspects of myself they portray.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
lol Well see the funny thing is, the human nature prose and poetry I write usually derives from what I've seen, know of, or have experienced. Most of the time it doesn't even come from me directly and sometimes it does. Thats the scary part of my writing, sometimes I have no clue were it comes from O.O
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
a bit like the 4am inspiration strikes. One moment your on the verge of sleep and the next you have to be sat in front of your laptop, typing like a madwoman because your brain just kicked into overdrive and your characters seem to be using your brain as a bouncy castle. (or prehaps thats just me) :P
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
Something like that, except my mind is kinda going all day long. I can usually do my normal tasks, work, sleep, etc, but 24-7 my mind is thinking of something and when I write it out, it sort of starts to breath life into itself directly from my head, sometimes I personally just feel like the transfer lol
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
Before now I've walked off mid-sentence because I just thought of how to solve a problem with a plot. :P
I'm seen as just a tad insane, but I know what you mean. It sometimes feels as if the characters are more real than myself, or if they are writing their own stories.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Student Writer
lol yeah like ur brain is using ur body as a pupeteer and ur eyes just sort of watch the magic ^^ So u like writing long stories then?
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Alezebet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I've got to give you a bow and tip of my hat because i too enjoy the nature and aspects of the kind and youve done quite well at showing the true nature of how someone can think.
Thoughh they want to use their death as a way to hurt someone in the long run it is a hollow victory in which the person will take instead of feeling defeated
its there final act against someone before all is lost.
keep up the good work.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks so much, I really appreciate your input :) I promise I will try, there are plenty of things to write about human nature for sure lol
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Alezebet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
indeed
i did a few on madness and fear
one on greed and one on depression
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
Alright, Ill have a look at those today. Id plan to do one on depression myself since I have chemical depression. It will be pretty easy haha
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Alezebet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
yeah i know how yah feel :/
mental problems run in my family haha
i just wrote a song thats just lyrically insane
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
Well it's nice to find someone who can relate that's for sure. Im Cory. Hope ull keep in touch. Ill have a look at ur work, it seems like it would be good especially since its emotionally driven
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Alezebet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
oh believe me i understand -___-
Im Austin ill make sure to keep in touch :)
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
I have this gut feelings that you do truley haha Thx Austin :)
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earth-heart Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
You are incredible at delving into the secrets hidden within the human psyche and bringing them to the forefront. This was a powerful piece, and I enjoyed it greatly. The end makes me feel a smug sense of pride and justification, which might be terrible, but it is what it is, I guess. *shrugs*

Incredibly well done. :heart:
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
Aw thanks! :hug: To be honest, Im pertty sure most people have that dark essence about them that is simmering in the core of their conscience, we just conform to society's beliefs of right and wrong, and shun our true intentions to make life easier. You, several others, and even myself probably felt the same way. Thank you for reading my work, I hope you'll continue to. ^^
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earth-heart Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
I can't argue with you there. Beneath the veil of society is the dark core that lies in peoples' hearts. Most just don't know how to reach it, or have deliberately locked it away. It takes a special kind of hand to dip into such darkness without being consumed.

I plan on continuing to read your work. I like the way you write. :heart:
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
Wow, I loved your perspective. That's very true lol Thaks a lot, I'm glad you enjoy my work, that's the reason I write ^^ Hope to try to make the next even better :)
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earth-heart Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
I enjoy your work greatly. I'm glad I found you. 8D
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
im glad you found me too! lol thank you!
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earth-heart Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
:heart: :heart: :cuddle:
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yamayama92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
i really like this... like a LOT!!! i like that i would be thinkin the same thing :P
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Student Writer
lol I think we all do xD We are all guilty of it haha
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glassreflections Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow.. I like this. I like the rhyme scheme.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
Aw thanks, I really like when u read my stuff, i always look forward to it :) The one i wrote before this a few days ago is called The Loving Cannibal. I was really hoping u could look at that one for me, its gotten a lot of good feedback
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glassreflections Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Um, thank you?
Yeah... I saw that one... I wasn't quite sure what to think...
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
Um, Your welcome? lol we've been friends for a year now, i figured it woudlnt be too ackward to say lol And is that a good thing or bad thing?
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glassreflections Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
It wasn't awkward.. it was just unexpected.

As for whether it was good or bad? It wasn't really necessarily either one... it was neutral... I just was not quite sure what to think about it. It's not a subject that I really think about, nor is it one I exactly want to wrap my mind around. So...
Don't take any of the above personally. It's just me.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
no its fine lol its really about fetishes, just an aspect of human nautre.But i wont ask if u dnt want
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glassreflections Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Well... to me... cannibalism isn't really a fetish. So, because I don't really see it that way, I cannot think of it in the terms you want to apply.
It's not that I don't want to discuss, the way that I view the subject does not allow me to see it in the particular way that it's being applied.
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
I gotcha. I guess i looked at it more so not such much the hunger aspect, but the drive to do something and developing an ecstacy for it without being able to control it. The cannibal wants to love, but he also has this indescribable tendency to eat her and it pains him but he does it anyway.
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Agent-Of-Insanity Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
For some sick demented reason, the end made me shout out "HA!"
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
For some sick, demented reason, I wrote this lol
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Agent-Of-Insanity Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, true true!
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
So I'm guessing you liked it? lol
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Agent-Of-Insanity Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure did! It stirred up a whole lot of different emotions! Mission accomplished eh?
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Dipshtick92 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
lol thanks ^^ You seem like you'd be a cool friend to have haha Very energetic x)
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